Hi everyone..
Now I want to share about my important thing in my life. When I was 17 years old, many people said that 17 years old is important and many people usually celebrate it. Same with them, my family celebrated my sweetseventten birthday. They gave me a gift a vacation to Jakarta, especially in Anyer beach.Wow, I was so excited. That's the best gift from my family that I've ever had.
This is the story....
My family and I went to Anyer beach for a picnic. We leave in the morning, because our house to Anyer beach took 12 hours. After arriving at the Anyer beach, we just took a walk because the beach is in front of the hotel.We walked along the seashore, played water and sand. Actually we also wanted to swim in the beach but the lifeguard didn't allow us. Besides doing many activities we also watched some foreign tourist's activities. They were lying on the beach, while others were having massage or surfing.
Finally, we felt tired, we took a rest to have some meals and drinks. We were going to back at the hotel,and took some rest. Tomorrow, we were going to go home because my father had an important work and my mom must finished her orders. So we leave around at 5 p.m after had early dinner.
it was a memorable experience. I think Ce Marcel writing ability’ is quite good , but my advice your writing will probably be great if you add more sentences. By writing more sentences will make us know a lot of things that we haven’t known before. Good Luck Ce Marcel.
BalasHapusI focus at your last sentence in this article. I think there is a lack at your sentence. Am I wrong?
BalasHapusI think that you have to complete your sentence with an object. I think that your sentence is must be like that. "So we left Jakarta around at 5 p.m after have had early dinner".
I think you made a mistake in write your sentence "sweetseventten" you must change be "sweet seventeen" and try not to abbreviate word because our lecture said do not abbreviate words in formal situation. I like your way to organise your writing. I can understand your story well. Good job ce Marcella!
BalasHapus